In an article for The New York Times, written by Roni Caryn Rabin, specialists are suggesting that using bariatric surgery (a weight loss surgery many American undergo to lose/control their weight, especially people with Type 2 Diabetes) gives more positive out comes than just weight loss. A study on the JAMA medical journal shared its findings that the alternatives from this surgery is cutting significant risks of cardiovascular tragedies and premature deaths by almost half.
I liked how the title of this article was very informing but it didn’t have a great hook to catch more of my attention. The title was an exact replica of the article, informing you on what’s going on, not beating around the bush. The body paragraphs were organized well. As in, it began on what the title was about, what the study meant, who it affects, if it’s positive or if it’s negative, who supports it and who contradicts it. It gave great sources of its information on the study and showed the statistics of the cases. Overall I thought this was a good article, not a biased base one. The only thing it would need is a more flashier title to grab more reader’s attention.
News Comment #5: “What You Need to Know Vaping-Related Lung Illness.”
Hundreds of people across the country have been struck ill by the known “Vaping Illness” which is linked to vaping. The authors of this article, Matt Richtel and Denise Grady compile what we know, who is at risk, symptoms and prevention.
Anyone who uses e-cigarettes or other vaping devices, whether to consume nicotine or substances extracted from marijuana or hemp, may be at risk because investigators have not determined whether a specific device or type of vaping liquid is responsible. Early symptoms are fatigue, nausea, vomiting, coughing and fever, shortness of breath–which can become so extreme it can prompt an emergency room visit. Mitch Zeller, director for the Center for Tobacco Products at the F.D.A. says,
The authors did an excellent job identifying each key subject and listing its importance from the top to bottom. They used the pyramid very well. Also, their organization in quotations, people identified, were placed well in the article. All in all they wrote a well written article informing the reader on the subject instead of beating around the bush on important key factors that should help the reader understand the article.