COUPLE SHOOT FINAL
November 12th, 2018
Newly wed wife shot by husband
Richard Brunson shot his wife Laurette Brunson in the abdomen early yesterday evening. The shooting happened mere hours after the couple had gotten married. (Everything’s great CLIP) The events that sparked the shooting was Laurette throwing a plate of macaroni salad at Richard during the reception (CLIP pop, pop, pop sound) Police say Richard Brunson is still at large and his whereabouts are unknown. Mrs. Brunson is in satisfactory condition.
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Good intro, Jon. Maybe just a bit more pause between the throwaway and the actual news lead. Let the first line sink in a bit before you go on.
You should try to put the source attribution before the soundbite. The second works better than the first since you break Walter’s comments into two pieces.
Good focus and organization.