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Local man killed today in car accident. Moyer Quick, a 65 year old man from Sioux City collided with a truck driven by Randy Radin, a 17 year old from Sioux City. The accident occurred on Highway 20, just outside Sioux City.

Moyer Quick was not killed instantly during the car accident. Quick was found killed through an autopsy of a heart failure. It is not official whether it was during the accident, before, or after.

Three survivors were taking to a Marian health center. Survivors included wife of deceased driver Dorothy Quick, 61 and Maxine Steuerwald, a 43 year old women from Lawton. The accident occurred when Quick tried to passed Radin but struck the rear-end of the vehicle causing both cars to enter the ditch.

Radin was later pronounced at 8:17 AM today. Radin was previously kept in intensive care. Dorothy Quick and Maxine Steuerwald were released the day of from the hospital. Steuerwald was the daughter-in-law to the Quick family.

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  1. fuglsang

    If you’re going to do it this way, Hunter, both deaths should be equal and in the lead.

    The original lead wasn’t too bad. To update it with the heart attack info, it would be
    “died” instead of “was killed.”

    Third graf OK.

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