Sep 08 2022
plane crash
Five person were killed of the Forty–five passengers and crew members aboard the TWA jet that Crashed on takeoff at Kennedy International Airport. Among the passengers, The Backwater State University professors escaped injury returning Thursday night from separate conferences in New York City.
Curriculum Changes
University president David French announces changes in graduation requirements. President French stated that “We feel that these new course requirements will allow us to turn out better–educated persons.” causing Students entering next fall must take one math, computer science, and foreign language course.
arrest
22–year–old senior, Cathy Wensen was arrested for driving under the influence of alcohol last night in Ontario Canada. Cathy was this year’s homecoming queen; has been a cheerleader, straight–A student and going to Vanderbilt University for graduate study in biology but got caught for the third time in six months and just so happened to be the daughter of locally prominent attorney Jim Wensen.
2 responses so far
First: Paragraphs. Second: Active verbs.
Five passengers died in a Thursday plane crash at Kennedy International Airport.
The TWA jet had 45 passengers and crew, including two BSU professors.
Then additional detail. Your lead isn’t for a BSU audience, which is OK.
Curriculum: Focus on the changes. The announcement isn’t the news.
Arrest: I don’t think she was arrested in Ontario. The parents are not relevant.