The lead works.
Vocal style is outside my expertise, but I think you could be a bit smoother in your delivery. You emphasize in odd places. Similarly, you throw in bits of information at odd times. As with the print stories, you want to give the listener information as they need it, in order to understand the story.
I would note earlier that Laurette is alive and recovering.
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