News Comments

News Comment #7: “White Girls, 10 and 11, Accused in Hate Crime After Assault on Black Classmate.”

Two young girls face criminal charges of harassment and assault of a 10-year-old African American girl on a school bus in a small upstate New York town. Local police of the town are associating this incident as a hate crime.

This article was informal to a point but their organization of information I believe was a little off. They addressed the two guilty parties and the victim, their age, where it happened and what is being done. It would be useful if the authors mentioned a deeper reason behind it besides the term “racial hate crime.” The children being tried and what the country will do is useful, but at the bottom of the article there are statistics of school hate crimes and how much they’ve gone up. I would like to think that would go up in the more important types but not as important. Those facts are very informal to the topic at hand.

News Comment #6: “America’s Abortion Rate Has Dropped to Its Lowest Ever.”

Abortion in the United States has decreased to a new record of low levels, the decline that may be from increased access to contraception (protection) and fewer women becoming pregnant. Than by state laws who restrict abortion.

I liked the subject of this article but the author did a very poor job in organizing. The information was not in order of importance and the main point of the whole article was not fully addressed. Abortion declining in the U.S. and barely finding out why isn’t enough information.

News Comment #5: “What You Need to Know Vaping-Related Lung Illness.”

Hundreds of people across the country have been struck ill by the known “Vaping Illness” which is linked to vaping. The authors of this article, Matt Richtel and Denise Grady compile what we know, who is at risk, symptoms and prevention.

The authors did an excellent job identify each key subject and listing its importance for the top to bottom. They used the pyramid very well. Also, their organization in quotations, people identified were placed well in the article. All in all they wrote a well written article informing the reader on the subject instead of beating around the bush on important key factors that should help the reader understand the article.

News Comment #4: “Weight-Loss Surgery May Reduce Heart Risks in People with Type 2 Diabetes.”

In an article for The New York Times, written by Roni Caryn Rabin, specialists are suggesting that using bariatric surgery (a weight loss surgery many American undergo to lose/control their weight, especially people with Type 2 Diabetes) gives more positive out comes than just weight loss. A study on the JAMA medical journal shared its findings that the alternatives from this surgery is cutting significant risks of cardiovascular tragedies and premature deaths by almost half. The findings and the study were so impactful many specialists are commenting on how to treat Type 2 Diabetes patients differently.

I liked how the title of this article was very informing but it didn’t have a great hook to catch more of my attention. The title was an exact replica of the article, informing you on what’s going on, not beating around the bush. The body paragraphs were organized well. As in, it began on what the title was about, what the study meant, who it affects, if it’s positive or if it’s negative, who supports it and who contradicts it. It gave great sources of its information on the study and showed the statistics of the cases. Overall I thought this was a good article, not a biased base one. The only thing it would need is a more flashier title to grab more reader’s attention.

News Comment #3: “Japan and South Korea Feud, but Breaking Up Is Hard.”

Allies Japan and South Korea have been giving each other the cold shoulder in recent months. Koreans have shown their dislike towards the Japanese by not buying Japanese imported goods and avoiding big profitable companies. In retaliation, the Japanese one up’d their feud by removing South Korea from their “white list” which is the list of approved trading of Japans allies.

The title of the article is a mouth full. It is attention grabbing for sure but the added analogies/extra wording ruins the informant point of the title. As for the body paragraphs of the article, there wasn’t a lot background information. The authors told how the two countries antagonized one another but never revealed why or what happened for them to do so. On the other hand, towards the closing it mentioned what a split like theirs would mean to the economy and what they would have to sacrifice with a decision like that.

News Comment #2: “16 States Report 153 Cases of Vaping-related Respiratory Illnesses.”

From the NY Times written by Sheila Kaplan it’s following the CDCP cases that have been occurring in people who admit they vape with nicotine or tetrahydrocannabinol. Symptoms reported are chest pain, vomiting and fatigue. According to the article, it’s a mystery to wear the illness is coming from, but it does not appear to be from an infectious disease. Most patients have been adolescences/young adults.

This was a very organized article, the title was attention grabbing. I liked the organization as in their facts were in order, from the symptoms to who’s being affected and what the next step of action is. I also liked how the article wasn’t biased against or for those who vape. This article should be read by more people because it enlightens on why vaping could be terrible for you.

News Comment #1: “Opinion: Report On Racism, But Ditch The Labels”

After a Tweet on Twitter targeting a group of Democratic Congresswomen, President Trump was presumed being racist/xenophobe towards that particular group. He Tweeted in his point of view he doesn’t understand why the Congresswomen who came from different governments who treated them poorly on why they should be an overpowering voice to tell other government officials how America should be run. From this post more topics about what the facts President Trump has to say about his foreshadow of racism, causing more tension on the issue. 

He also added at the end of his Tweet, “Why don’t they go back and help fix the totally broken and crime infested places from which they came.”

I think the title of this article could have been way better at grabbing and audiences attention. You can tell the writer of this article was putting personal views onto this article in particular. Everything was easy to read/follow along with and got to the point of the main conflict. There should be recapping and giving the facts and quoting others reactions/opinions, not their own depending on the situation.