Catch my ear with a BC lead on the first story, Sarah. I like the focus on language, though, rather than on the speech. More from Jim.
You’ll have to revise to go from print to audio. Boil down the Connie story to the main info. Cut what might end up being distraction.
Good on transitions. I also like the quotes, but be careful when you’re reading someone’s quote. You have a tendency to try to “mimic” or change your voice to something more like you’re source. Just stick with your voice.
You’re broadcasting, Sarah! You’re on the air!
Catch my ear with a BC lead on the first story, Sarah. I like the focus on language, though, rather than on the speech. More from Jim.
You’ll have to revise to go from print to audio. Boil down the Connie story to the main info. Cut what might end up being distraction.
Good on transitions. I also like the quotes, but be careful when you’re reading someone’s quote. You have a tendency to try to “mimic” or change your voice to something more like you’re source. Just stick with your voice.
Good pace.