Include the throwaway lead, Cassidy. Get my attention before jumping into the story.
I like the way you do the attribution. Good editing of the first quote.
I would probably note earlier that Laurette is alive and recovering. There is something to be said for keeping the listener hanging, but in this case maybe let them know she’s alive at the top.
fuglsang says
Include the throwaway lead, Cassidy. Get my attention before jumping into the story.
I like the way you do the attribution. Good editing of the first quote.
I would probably note earlier that Laurette is alive and recovering. There is something to be said for keeping the listener hanging, but in this case maybe let them know she’s alive at the top.