Blog #5 – Leads

https://www.newyorker.com/magazine/2021/09/13/the-other-afghan-women

Article: The Other Afghan Women by Anand Gopal

Article Lead:

In the countryside, the endless killing of civilians turned women against the occupiers who claimed to be helping them.

Late one afternoon this past August, Shakira heard banging on her front gate. In the Sangin Valley, which is in Helmand Province, in southern Afghanistan, women must not be seen by men who aren’t related to them, and so her nineteen-year-old son, Ahmed, went to the gate. Outside were two men in bandoliers and black turbans, carrying rifles. They were members of the Taliban, who were waging an offensive to wrest the countryside back from the Afghan National Army. One of the men warned, “If you don’t leave immediately, everyone is going to die.”

My thoughts: I couldn’t quite decide if the first sentence after the heading was already the lead or the first paragraph so I assume it’s both. I think the first sentence works more in a hard-news way, by briefly summarizing the topic of the article. The anecdote in the first paragraph is more of a feature lead, meant as a way to draw the reader in.

In my opinion, the anecdote does a good job raising the interest of the reader. There is enough information to understand the who, when, and what but it leaves the reader wondering about why everyone will die if they don’t leave immediately. I think it sets the scene well and gives the reader a sense of the danger of the situation.

My Leads:

The Snappy: Routine in rural Afghanistan: Leave your house or die.

The Magazine: “If you don’t leave immediately, everyone is going to die.” – Last August was not Shakira’s first time being faced with such a statement or the danger that was to follow it. In her 40 years of life, the Afghan woman from the Sangin valley encountered death, violence, and destruction in many different forms and from various sources of aggression. The Soviet Army, local mujahideen factions, American forces, and the Taliban – all had brought some form of violence to Afghanistan and to Shakira’s neighborhood. In this ever-changing power struggle, it had become difficult for Afghans to tell friends from enemies.

The Standard: For many Afghan women living in the country’s conservative rural areas, the Taliban have gone from loathed enemies to restorers of order.

Blog #4 – Characters and Structure of a Feature

The article I selected: https://www.sfchronicle.com/projects/2021/jessica-simulation-artificial-intelligence/

This feature is about a Canadian guy (Josh) who successfully customized an AI chatbot on the website “Project December” to mimic his late fiancee Jessica. The author not only writes about how the AI helped Josh with his grieving journey but also about Project December itself as well as its creator and its development.

There are several key characters that this story is about:

First, there is Josh Barbeau, the main subject of the story. 33-year-old Josh has been dealing with the death of his fiancee Jessica for the past 8 years and because of that has somewhat isolated himself from the outside world. After trying out random chatbots on “Project December” he decided to create one based on his late fiancee and was positively surprised by the accuracy of the result. The feature includes Josh’s AI story as well as background information on him such as his personality and interests.

Another character is Jessica Pereira. She died in 2012 at the age of 23 from a rare type of liver disease. The author writes about Jessica’s life, death, personality, and interests. The latter two were mainly mentioned to show what Jessica was like so that the reader can get a feeling of whether the transcripts of Josh’s conversation with Jessica’s AI seem genuine.

The third main character in this feature is the creator of “Project December” – Jason Rohrer. The author writes about how he developed the program, what he intended it to do, and how he reacted to hearing about Josh’s story on Reddit.

Regarding the narrative structure of the feature, I thought it was a little too much back and forth. It jumped in between Josh’s, Jessica’s, and Jason’s stories which made it quite confusing at times. I think the author intended to break up the heaviness of Josh’s and Jessica’s story by using this structure which in itself is a reasonable approach. However, I couldn’t shake the feeling that there was so much back and forth that the author forgot what information he had already talked about and mentioned several things several times.

In the end, I think the feature is “about” unusual ways of dealing with grief and the potential of AIs for goodness.

Overall, I do think the story is true. This is because the author received his information from the subjects as well as people close to them. There is a lot of deep information in the article, which for me shows that the author put a lot of time and thought into this feature and wanted it to be an accurate representation of what had happened. The article also includes the original transcripts of Josh’s conversation with the Jessica chatbot.

Blog #3 – Out of 1 make 5

I chose the NYT story “Mississippi’s Capital Loses Water as a Troubled System Faces a Fresh Crisis” by Rick Rojas. The story was front-page in the paper of August 31, 2022.

https://www.nytimes.com/2022/08/30/us/mississippi-jackson-water.html

Potential features that could be created out of this story:

  1. The troubled story of drinking water in the US
  2. The efficiency of home water filters (like Brita)
  3. Drinking water quality in the US in comparison with other countries
  4. The number 1 question when traveling anywhere in the world: Can I drink the local tap water?
  5. Water Quality at Morningside University – what exactly are students drinking?
  6. How drinking water can make or break communities
  7. Drinking water – an inconspicuous detail of life that we only really start to worry about when it is missing

Overall, the feature I would most like to do is a mix between 2 and 5 or, alternatively, just 7. I think it would be interesting to find out about the quality of drinking water on campus. Maybe I could enlist a biology professor to show me how to test water quality. For 7, it would be interesting to write about what effect it has when tap water suddenly can’t be trusted anymore and what should be done to avoid that happening to communities.

Blog #2 – Why do we need stories?

In its most general form, a story to me is any written or spoken narration that tells the reader/listener about a fictional or real event, person, thing, or place. Looking more specifically at journalistic stories, they, in my opinion, are only concerned with reporting about real events, things, places, and people.

The reason why we need fictional stories is that human beings like to be entertained. However, the primary reason why we need journalistic stories is that we like to be informed about the things happening around us. This allows us to make informed decisions on how to react to these things. In the case of feature stories, the entertainment part also plays a role, yet that role is smaller than in fictional stories because the reader technically still becomes more informed about the world while reading them.

Blog #1 – News and Feature Writing

Generally, the stories I enjoy reading are the ones that uncover lies, half-truths, scandals, and other things that the person or group involved did not want the world to find out about. So basically all things corruption, environmental issues, social issues, and international issues. I enjoy them because the journalists behind them do an enormous amount of research and have to overcome quite a few obstacles to uncover a societal ill they think the public needs to know about.

Regarding features, I’d say I’m most interested in reading about people whose life stories are extraordinary. I also like reading features that talk about topics of interest to me such as soccer, traveling, and cooking. And finally, I like reading features that deal with mysteries, discoveries, and historic events.

What I want to achieve in this class this semester is to learn how to write features. My articles so far have all been more or less factual and I’m excited to now be able to write a bit more creatively. I also want to write somewhat more significant articles than I’ve done in past years.

Final Profile #4 – What it means to be “high risk” during the COVID-19 pandemic

Strained breaths, coughing, and pale skin. That is the condition Madelynn “Maddie” Stoffle was in when she was admitted to St. Luke’s Hospital in October last year. It was shortly after the midterm exam week came to an end for students at Morningside College. While her peers finally got a break to catch their breath, literal breathing became an exceptionally hard task for then-freshman Stoffle.

Catching a normal cold turned into being hospitalized for two days because of an upper respiratory infection. A healthy person would only have needed over the counter medicine and some rest, but for Stoffle it meant breathing treatments and heavy medicine.

The cause behind the cold turned infection was Stoffle’s asthma, which she has been struggling with since she contracted RSV (Respiratory Syncytial Virus) as a child. Until recently, the 20-year-old developmental psychology major only ever really had to be concerned about the winter months and the flu season.

2020 however, brought on an entirely new challenge for her. Because of her weakened immune system, Stoffle is part of the group of humans who are at high risk of contracting the Coronavirus and developing a life-threatening version of COVID-19. When the pandemic first began spreading globally, Stoffle moved back home from college and entered a lockdown that was far away from the isolation period the rest of the country experienced.

After consulting with her lung doctor and mother, she stayed out of the public and away from everybody who could possibly be carrying the virus – for three entire months. As her mother is a nurse, Stoffle also had to stay away from her. The family had to create an area in the basement where her mother could live while Stoffle was at home.

“I was not able to be around and hug my mother for three months. We would have conversations from the base of the stairs while I stayed at the top,” Stoffle said about this surreal situation.

Whenever Stoffle’s younger brothers came into contact with their mother, they had to wear a mask at all times, shower right afterward, and also wash their clothes. While other people were fighting over the last toilet paper roll in supermarkets, Stoffle couldn’t even go to the store to get groceries. She only left the house to drive to the park when the walls seemed to close in on her.

After a long discussion with her mother, Stoffle decided in August to go back to college for the fall semester. Following safety regulations closely and making sure to stay away from those who don’t do the same is her key to staying healthy.

Stoffle is a very social person which has only made the lockdown harder for her. At College, she surrounded herself with friends who she can be sure take COVID-19 measures seriously. Because of that, she has managed to carry on college life almost like before.

One of Stoffle’s closer friends on campus and soccer teammate Megan Messersmith says, “I know she has a lot of health issues. She has said that if she gets COVID-19 she could potentially die so we try to stay as safe as possible in order to keep Maddie safe while still being able to hang out with her.”

But even though COVID-19 might mean that Stoffle has to take more precautions than others she is determined to not let that affect her life. Despite all the troubles of the last year, Stoffle has kept a very positive mindset.

She has set goals, friendships, and the usual amount of trouble college students typically find themselves confronted with. Every few weeks she sports a new hair color radiating positivity. Former roommate and friend Annika Zentel, says, “Maddie is a very sweet person. She cares a lot about others and always puts them first.”

Right now, Stoffle would need other people to care about others as much as she does. Stoffle has a clear opinion on those who refuse to wear masks and still believe the pandemic is a hoax, “I think this really shows how people really are and how they value themselves higher than even their children. I wished that people cared more about other people than themselves.”

She just wants other people to wear masks and be thoughtful about the situation. “Please wear a mask, please. It could and can mean the difference between someone like me living for a longer time and me dying before I get to celebrate my twenty-first birthday.”

First Draft Article/Profile #4: What it means to be “high risk” during the COVID-19 pandemic

The pandemic has caused a whole lot of chaos in most people’s lives but few of us were as drastically affected as people in the high-risk group. One of those people, Morningside College sophomore Madelynn Stoffle, offers an insight into the craziness of the past few months.

Strained breaths, coughing, and pale skin. That is how Madelynn Stoffle was admitted to St. Luke’s Hospital in October last year. It was shortly after the midterm exam week came to an end for students at Morningside College. While her peers finally got a break to catch their breath, literal breathing became an exceptionally hard task for then-freshman Madelynn “Maddie” Stoffle. Catching a normal cold turned into being hospitalized for two days because of an upper respiratory infection. What would have taken a usually healthy person over the counter medicine and some rest, meant breathing treatments and heavy medicine for Stoffle.

The cause behind the cold turned infection was Stoffle’s asthma, which she has been struggling with since she contracted RSV (Respiratory Syncytial Virus) as a child. Until 2020, the 20-year-old developmental psychology major only ever really had to be concerned about the winter months and the flu season.

2020 however, brought on an entirely new challenge for her. Because of her weakened immune system, Maddie Stoffle is part of the group of humans who are at high risk of contracting the Coronavirus and developing a life-threatening version of COVID-19. When the pandemic first began spreading globally, Stoffle moved back home from college and entered a lockdown that was far away from the isolation period the rest of the country experienced.

After consulting with her lung doctor and mother, she stayed out of the public and away from everybody who could possibly be carrying the virus – for three entire months. As her mother is a nurse, Stoffle also had to stay away from her. The family had to create an area in the basement where her mother could live while Madelynn was at home. “I was not able to be around and hug my mother for three months. We would have conversations from the base of the stairs while I stayed at the top,” Stoffle said about this surreal situation.

Whenever Madelynn’s younger brothers came into contact with their mother, they had to wear a mask at all times, shower right afterward, and also wash their clothes. While other people were fighting over the last toilet paper roll in supermarkets, Stoffle couldn’t even go to the store to get groceries. She only left the house to drive to the park when the walls seemed to close in on her.

After a long discussion with her mother, Stoffle decided in August to go back to college for the fall semester. Following safety regulations closely and making sure to stay away from those who don’t do the same is her key to staying healthy. But even though COVID-19 might mean that Stoffle has to take more precautions than others she is determined to not let that affect her life.

Despite all the troubles of the last year, Madelynn Stoffle has kept a very positive mindset. She has set goals, friendships, and the usual amount of trouble college students typically find themselves confronted with. Every few weeks she sports a new hair color radiating positivity.

Stoffle is a very social person which has made the lockdown even harder for her. Former roommate and friend Annika Zentel, says, “Maddie is a very sweet person. She cares a lot about others and always puts them first.”

Right now, Stoffle would need other people to care about others as much as she does. Stoffle has a clear opinion on those who refuse to wear masks and still believe the pandemic is a hoax, “I think this really shows how people really are and how they value themselves higher than even their children. I wished that people cared more about other people than themselves.”

She just wants other people to wear masks and be thoughtful about the situation. “Please wear a mask, please. It could and can mean the difference between someone like me living for a longer time and me dying before I get to celebrate my twenty-first birthday.”

Media Comment #13

Article/Profile: “How Eliud Kipchoge Broke Running’s Mythic Barrier” by Knox Robinson

https://www.gq.com/story/inside-eliud-kipchoge-kenya-training-compound

The profile is about Eliud Kipchoge running a marathon in under 2 hours. Nobody has ever managed to do it before him. The record brought him international fame but also sparked controversy about how innovation in running gear complicates the ethics of the sport of running. The writer traveled to a runner’s training camp in Kenya to spend time with Kipchoge. In the beginning, he wrote about the experience of training with the camp’s runners.

The first few paragraphs are about the morning routine of Kipchoge and some descriptions of the training camp and its surroundings. I think the entire training situation can be seen as an anecdote but even though it’s very interesting it’s a little too long in my opinion. By the time the writer writes about the actual topic – Kipchoge and the controversy around him – I didn’t really know anymore what the article was actually supposed to be about. There is a lot of switches between topics which makes the article chaotic. I also think that the writer puts himself into the story a little too much.

Media Comment #12

Profile/Article: “For Italy’s Masked Rap Diva, an Era of Face Coverings Poses a Dilemma” by Jason Horowitz

https://www.nytimes.com/2020/10/23/world/europe/italy-myss-keta-masks.html?searchResultPosition=2

The profile is about the Italian rapper Myss Keta. Since 2013 she has been using masks to hide her identity and it has become an unofficial trademark of hers. Before COVID-19 she was on the brink of becoming a celebrity but with everybody wearing face masks now she has more or less lost her most defining characteristic.

The first paragraph in the profile is an anecdote describing how Myss Keta distributed her huge mask collection to her friends when Italy experienced the first surge of COVID-19. Overall, the article is not just about the rapper as a person but also holds some news value as she lost her defining characteristic because of the current pandemic.

The writer used descriptive elements when he wrote about how Myss Keta is taking pictures with fans or sipping on a drink. The writer did not use the inverted pyramid to structure the article because no information seems more important than any other. The article only features Myss Keta as a source for her own story and two other sources about Italy, art, and mask-wearing in general. I think the writer should have used more sources for the actual topic because it would have given different points of view to the profile.

Article #3 – Broadcast News Writing

Script

It is 8 o’clock and you are listening to KECR Sioux City. This is your host Emily Rotthaler.

Morningside College still needs to improve its environmental efforts to reach the sustainability goal it has set itself.

Especially in regard to recycling, more should and could be done. After several setbacks like having to switch vendors, the Committee is struggling with the reorganization of the basic recycling process.

John Helms, chair of the sustainability committee: QUOTE

Additionally, the students still don’t show enough environmental awareness to fully be on board with recycling.

Freshman Taylar Johnson said this about the awareness of recycling of her peers. QUOTE

In other news, November 2 2020 marked the twentieth anniversary of humans continuously occupying the International Space Station ISS.

Starting with two Russian and one American astronaut in 2000 there has always been someone living and working at the station in low-Earth orbit. According to the National Geographic, this means that for the past twenty years there has not been one moment that every single human being was on earth.

College student Megan Messersmith has this to say about the anniversary:

QUOTE

Over the two decades, 241 women and men have called the 150-billion-dollar station their home. Several astronauts have spent more than a year on the ISS. Over a 100 thousand people contributed to its design and construction. The space station is a joint project of 15 countries and was started by the US in 1984 as “Space Station Freedom”.

In the same week as the anniversary, the 2020 presidential elections have taken a toll on the mental health of students who have already been struggling with the COVID-19 pandemic.

While millions of votes were still counted on Wednesday and Thursday, university students had to concentrate on their school work. Many students said that between classes and exams there was barely enough time to vote.

According to Vox, this led to high levels of anxiety for students, who in 2020 already have had to go through major difficulties because of the pandemic.

Morningside College Sophomore Maddie Stoffle describes how the days after the election felt. QUOTE

In this time, many students wish for more understanding and concern about their well-being by their educational institutions.

That was the latest news. And now let’s get back to some music, here is Bastille with Pompeii.