Walking into the lobby hotel, seeing the remodeling tarps and knocked over wall, Katy Hackworth wished the talks about where to stay with her boyfriend sooner. Her three-day weekend in Kansas City was meant to be a good time but this hotel might sour that dream.
Checking in had been a hurdle due to no concierge being at the front desk. The smell of the front lobby was the biggest flag for Katy about the sketchiness of their hotel.
The young couple had to trek up seven flights of stairs, before standing in front of the slightly cracked open door to their room. The room itself was filled with small signs that Katy had red flags about. The seal on the deal came with the fact that both televisions were on when they entered the room. Katy knew she needed to find a room somewhere else in the morning.
Readers need to hear from Katy. Use her description of the smell and of the room. Let her express the fear she felt climbing the stairs.