News Comment #2
Comments(2) | THE HOTTEST SEPTEMBER DAY ON EARTH WAS JUST RECORDED IN DEATH VALLEY: from mic.com
Death Valley is known as the hottest place on Earth, and this September, it shows. On September 12th, 2023, the desert valley in Eastern California reached temperatures of 127 degrees Fahrenheit. This would mark the hottest September we’ve ever had.
Death Valley is not a stranger to hot temperatures. The hottest recorded temperature there was 134 degrees Fahrenheit. But this is just the air temp. The ground got to be 201 degrees Fahrenheit during this September.
Now the entire state of California is suffering in the heat. It’s gotten so bad that Governer Gavin Newsom declared a state of emergency. More than 50 million people across the West Coast are under a heat advisory.
This is OK as summary, Thomas, but now tell me what you think of it. How’s the lead.
Mic.com isn’t really my thing, and this story is a good example. The first word is “You,”
as in, “You wouldn’t expect a place named Death Valley to be particularly pleasant,
but it reached new levels this weekend.”
So who is you? Is it me? I don’t think about Death Valley very often. It’s just not the style
for me. It’s closer to broadcast.
One other thing. Include a link to the story. The only way I found it was
because you have mic.com in the headline. From what I could tell,
Mic doesn’t include a search function.