Sep 08 2022
Plane Crash: 5 Dead
5 people killed in plane crash with Backwater State University professors narrowly escaping injury. Associate professor of rural sociology John Dumont and associate professor of English George Johnson, both from Backwater State University were returning Thursday night from separate conferences in New York City.
45 passengers and crew members boarded the plane. Then the plane crashed on takeoff at Kennedy International Airport. Five people were killed.
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Still need verbs, Jacob. You also have quite a bit of repetition. Just focus on the important Ws in the lead:
Two BSU professors survived a plane crash Thursday that killed five passengers.
Then the next detail.
Then the next.