The article was about 2008’s No. 1 Draft pick Jack Watts retiring, citing the physical and emotional toll his injury last season as his reasoning. The lead is pretty alright, but the structure of the article itself isn’t as good, in my opinion. I personally feel that the information about his scandals off the field don’t really have TOO much to do with the article and should maybe be put below his and others’ statements or just omit it entirely. It would be one thing if the article implies that those are the real reason for his retirement, but I don’t really get that vibe. Other than that, it’s pretty okay.
Pretty alright? I will assume that’s mostly great.
For a second I thought I counted this as your week #4 comment.
A big AFL fan, are you? I can see what you mean about the
scandals. But if that was a big part of his career, leaving it out
isn’t going to make anyone forget it.