OK overall, Derrick, but a bit more rehearsal may be in order. You’re working to be fluid. When doing your introductions, you could summarize a bit what your sources say, rather than, “Jared was enthusiastic and happy with the new game play,” rather than, “Here’s Jared.”
Good use of transitions, story 1 to 2. Good wrestling quote.
OK overall, Derrick, but a bit more rehearsal may be in order. You’re working to be fluid. When doing your introductions, you could summarize a bit what your sources say, rather than, “Jared was enthusiastic and happy with the new game play,” rather than, “Here’s Jared.”
Good use of transitions, story 1 to 2. Good wrestling quote.
fuglsang 11.29.11 @ 4:32 pm