8 Year Old Boy Hero, News Story #5

The fact the story had a video with it made me like the news story that much more. They had two really good quotes, one was from a neighbor and the other from the 8 year old boy. It had all the information in the story and still kept the story short and to the point. It only took me a couple minutes to read the story and that’s the kind of news article I like to read. I had a problem with the lead. It was good but it was WAY to long! It could have been broken down into two sentences! It was like three and a half lines. I tried reading it without any breathes because there is no period to take a breath and I did it but it was hard. The lead needs to be much shorter.