News Comment #3

http://news.yahoo.com/giant-boulder-slides-onto-road-lands-man-150356982.html

CRAZY story! I didn’t believe it when I first read the headline! While made me click into it and read it all!! It was short but still had all the details in you that you needed to know. The only thing I didn’t like about it is at the end when the author put in a quote from the Summit Fire Department Captain said “he was obviously scared and in a lot of pain” I personally don’t think that was needed. Obviously if a 30 ton boulder falls on you you’re gonna automatically be scared and in a lot of pain! I think the author could have gotten a much better quote then that. But other then at the lead and writing level was good. The lead didn’t get my attention as much as the header did.



1 Comment so far

  1.   fuglsang on September 16th, 2013

    The quote lends itself to the drama of the story. The newscasters are a liitle too breathless, but the story was interesting. An sensational headline can improve readership; as long as it’s accurate.