Shooting Broadcast Exercise
After a day of happiness came a day of pain.
The day after Richard and Laurette Brunson’s wedding, Richard shot Laurette in the abdomen.
A neighbor, Walter Corse, said “I heard the sound of the shot, or I think I did. It was kind of a pop, pop, pop.” He then says one of Laurette’s three children came out of the house, yelling that she had been shot and can’t breathe.
Sgt. Mann, a police spokesman, tells reporters “the shooting occurred at 5 p.m. It happened after she threw a plate of wedding reception macaroni salad at him. His whereabouts are still unknown.”
Laurette is in the hospital and had no comment on the situation. Officials say she is “in satisfactory condition”.
I like the idea of the throwaway/soft lede, Sondra, but there were only hours in between, not days. Maybe it could be a moment of happiness, then a moment of pain.
Give the important facts–who and what–before going to Corse. You could also do the Why. People are going to want to know why he shot her. You could do that, in part, by switching Mann in first, then Corse.
I would get Laurette’s condition in sooner.