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Former Oakland Raiders player dies of brain condition (news comment)

Neiron Ball, 27, a former linebacker for the Oakland Raiders dies of rare brain condition.

Ball was struck with a brain aneurysm in December of 2018 and later placed in a medically induced coma. Ball’s family says that Ball has been conscious through his coma. Natalie Myricks, Ball’s Sister, stated, “He can track with his eyes, but he can’t move his legs, arms or neck”.

The lead this article used was pretty good, using injury and death to attract readers. The author also did a good job staying away from biases and let the quotes provoke emotion.

Article: https://www.espn.com/nfl/story/_/id/27585942/neiron-ball-27-dies-battling-brain-condition

1 Comment

  1. fuglsang

    What would the biases be?

    The lead is pretty straightforward, and the writer does let his sources provide the information, including tweets. This is close to being an obituary. It summarizes his life and allows friends to have their say.

    Does that seem standard for a sports site? Does it fit? Is it newsworthy?

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