As a throwaway/soft lede, it works, but if this had been a real situation I would have been, at least momentarily, freaked out by “shooter on the loose.” Consider what your listeners will hear, and how they might react. You do follow immediately with explanation, but there’s still that moment some people’s hearts could skip a beat.
You can rely on Mann to tell the facts, but as a reporter that should be you. Use your sources to back you up, and to add other necessary/interesting details. You should carry the most weight.
As a throwaway/soft lede, it works, but if this had been a real situation I would have been, at least momentarily, freaked out by “shooter on the loose.” Consider what your listeners will hear, and how they might react. You do follow immediately with explanation, but there’s still that moment some people’s hearts could skip a beat.
You can rely on Mann to tell the facts, but as a reporter that should be you. Use your sources to back you up, and to add other necessary/interesting details. You should carry the most weight.
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