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Good lead, Nick. You should probably indicate at the start that Laurette is alive. You make it sound like she may be dead. You introduce the speakers well. You bring drama and immediacy to the story. Some times that’s probably good, but you may want to take more of an “observer” tone.
November 8th, 2011 at 4:36 pm
Good lead, Nick. You should probably indicate at the start that Laurette is alive. You make it sound like she may be dead. You introduce the speakers well. You bring drama and immediacy to the story. Some times that’s probably good, but you may want to take more of an “observer” tone.