Officer Shoots Man Wielding a Knife in Brooklyn, Police Say
Davonte Pressley was shot three times after wielding a knife outside of a laundromat on Ralph Avenue in Brooklyn. When the police arrived, he refused to drop his weapon and lunged towards the officers. Davonte was consequently shot for his actions. He is currently in Brookdale University Hospital where he is in critical condition. He sustained wounds to his shoulder and torso.
I thought it was interesting that the article also talked about a shooting that happened a week prior. The paragraphs that cover the other shooting even take up about a quarter of the total article. I wonder if the author is hinting at anything by including details of the other shooting. For example, the author could have been implying the police officers of Brooklyn have been a little trigger happy, since the shooting a week prior supposedly could have been avoided.
The lead and headline of this article were short and to the point, but weren’t overly interesting. I suppose there’s only so much you can do with a story about a shooting. The story was also organized well and I like that they didn’t try to make it long-winded.
I thought the quote they included from a nearby store owner was an interesting choice. The quote was, “And I heard pow, pow, pow.” I don’t believe that this quote is strong or necessary to include in this story, even if it does give more of a sense of background. I feel like such a quote would translate better in broadcast because they could show a clip of the store owner actually speaking the quote, making it seem more relevant.
This may have been updated since you wrote the comment. The last two grass about the woman shot are a smaller percentage of the story, I think. But you are probably correct about the rwiter trying to make a connection between the two shootings. They are close in time, but making that connection is probably out of line.