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WNC #3

September 16th, 2010 by Gustav

WNC #3

Doctors’ Group Attacks McDonald’s in TV Ad, by Duffy Wilson

This article from the N.Y. Times posted online today was quite amusing to me. The headline sounded interesting and out-of-the-blue to me. So I clicked on it. There is a group of doctors that publicly attacked America’s number one fast food choice: McDonald’s. They filmed a commercial displaying a thick, dead man with a burger in his hand. At the end of the sequence it says: “Tonight, make it vegetarian.” The main focus of the story is to present McDonald’s response and the backgrounds to the TV ad.

I really like the way this story is presented. It is short, uses inverted pyramid style and even integrates the actual subject, as one can access the ominous ad between the opening paragraphs. The lead might not be as clear and informing, but it throws some concepts out there that are related to the point of the story. After the introduction of the advertisement, the author explains its origin and McDonald’s response to it, which I thought was a good idea to start with (directly opposing the two “interest groups”). Then the group of doctors’ founding and background is explained. I didn’t necessarily want to read all that, but that’s why you can find it fairly late in the story (‘fairly’ because the article is relatively short compared to stories about politics or economy). I also think the author used appropriate and well fitting quotes and style of language.

Btw… I liked this advertisement so much; I had to post it on my Facebook page 😉

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Rewrite on Quick story

September 15th, 2010 by Gustav

Elderly man kills himself and harms other in car accident

A South Sioux City male resident died in a car collision yesterday morning on highway 20. Moyer Quick, 65, maneuvered his rear-end into a 17-year-old’s truck when he passed him. The three survivors of the accident had to be transported by the ambulance.

Quick’s wife Dorothy is reported to be in okay condition, while her friend Maxine, who was in the car with the married couple, must have suffered from minor bruises. Young Randy Radin, on the other hand, took a fractured skull and internal injuries from the accident. His situation is described as critical.

Both vehicles were proceeding in westward direction on the two-lane highway. Quick’s rear-end struck Radin’s truck, the impact sending both vehicles into the ditch, Iowa Highway Patrolman Patric Stewart explained.

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Story-writing exercise 09/15/2010

September 14th, 2010 by Gustav

Local fire fighter saves cat

Breaking his leg, a local fire fighter saved a cat out of a 50 feet oak tree. The cat climbed up into the big tree at 102 11th avenue. When fire fighter Bob Harwood secured the frightened animal, a dead limb broke underneath him so that both the cat and the man fell the last 15 feet.

Calico, so the cat’s name, landed on top of Bob and left the scene without a scratch. Bob had to be examined at St. Lukes Hospital, where they diagnosed a broken leg but said “he’ll be doing just fine.”  The two twins, Suzanne and Samantha Decker, who own the cat, can thank their hero for his risky rescue attempt.

General unrest at East High

Ten upperclassmen were suspended for one week, as they supposedly made false alarm sound three times last Wednesday. The students were disgruntled because five of their fellow east-highers had been suspended from school due to smoking marijuana in the school’s parking lot on Monday. They simply wanted to protest.

Just on Tuesday, the cafeteria closed because a food fight broke out. Principal Laura Vibelius thinks there is “not so much unrest because of suspensions, but because summer vacation being so near.” She is positive not to experience similar incidents in the near future.

Gas truck incident temporarily shocks east suburban area of Sioux City

A gasoline truck overturned on the outskirts of Sioux City, causing set-up of reroutes and evacuations of four families. The gas from the Texaco truck flooded into surrounding sewer lines, leaving puddles on the streets and in the ditches.

The following two hours after the accident, cars had to be rerouted through side streets, as the intersection 48th and Correctionville Rd. was blocked. “Our men strictly followed catastrophe and hazmat procedures that were set up beforehand for such occurrences”, Fire Chief Charles Hochandel said about the work of his men.

No one was injured or health-impaired, as concerned families had been evacuated quickly enough to avoid the gas ascending from the sewer lines.

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Final Draft Paper#1 on Description

September 12th, 2010 by Gustav

Don’t Stop & Leave

by Gustav Hollnagel

The Kum-&-Go on Morningside avenue used to be a 7/11 around ten years ago. The gas station itself hasn’t been renovated since, but the counter has moved from time to time.

The white and red signs saying “kum & go” are remotely visible. There are only two pumps. The occasional white pick-up or dark-colored car stops to access the market function of the gas station. Car engines keep running while their owners enter the transparent aluminum door. Milk, tobacco, and snacks are the highlights of revenue when the day grows older. When night approaches the place turns into a desert.

The grey, clustered clouds above it provide atmosphere close to a foggy tavern silently nourishing in Northern Europe; empty and socially evaded. There is a light at the side of the building that is quite functional. However, the occasional “buzz” visibly resounds.

Entering the station bright lights burn your eye light, their sources spread among advertisement, special offers, and product packaging. Virtually no one except the cashier resides between the aisles and different food corners. Empty, deserted, socially evaded. It’s a vacant castle where candy bars and carbonated drinks are the replacement for ancient bricks and wooden bars.

“Klick”. The aluminum door opens. Twice. A Morningside College professor walks in. To a Kum-&-Go around 8 pm at night. He looks a tad confused about what he came here for; then he recalls. Apparently, professors are hunters of cheap fountain drinks. Bargain of the night: 32 oz. drink for only 59 cents.

The place shines thirstily when another customer approaches the food and fountain corner, which practically draws immediate attention to a disoriented customer. Even the desert is home to flowering oases. One chats with the fellow camel, consults about the fortunes ad fates, and after 2 minutes of irrelevant talk it all regresses back to human life.

The cashier was evidently glad he could present his exotic offerings to the tidy travelers, at least tonight that is. Surprisingly, between two customers one could claim to observe outmost diversity.

“Zzz-zz-nnnn-zzzz”. The ice machine recurrently starts humming. Have a slushy or some frozen food while you’re at it. “Cha-ching”. The cash register flies open and is pushed close just as fast. One could become distracted in this place. Too many unexpected sounds. Some sort of steady beep tone springs from the backside of the tobacco facet. Marlboro Light; Marlboro Menthol; Marlboro 100’s; Marlboro Menthol Light; Marlboro Regular; Marlboro Ultra Light; Marlboro Paradise? Marlboro Heaven? Tobacco must be hard to come by at other places after seeing this arsenal of lung extinguishers.

The sub convex mirrors at the end of the outside aisles reflect the image of the black guy exiting the station, fountain drink in his hand. Cashier X jolly awaits the two cars leaving, so he can too exit the red, purple and shop-worn interior. It won’t be his last cigarette for the night…

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Story assignment on description

September 9th, 2010 by Gustav

Don’t Stop & Leave

The Kum-&-Go on Morningside avenue used to be a 7/11 around ten years ago. The gas station itself hasn’t been renovated since, but the counter has moved from time to time. The white and red sign saying “kum & go” is remotely visible. There are only two pumps. The occasional white pick-up or dark-colored car stops to access the market function of the gas station. Car engines keep running while their owners enter the transparent aluminum door. Milk, tobacco, and snacks are the highlights of revenue when the day grows older. When night approaches it is a deserted place. The grey wall of clouds above it made the place come close to a tavern in Northern Ireland when the fog looms around the forested hills; empty and socially evaded. There is a light at the side of the building that is quite functional. However, the occasional “buzz” visibly resounds.

Entering the station bright lights burn your eye light, their sources spread among advertisement, special offers, and product packaging. Virtually no one except the cashier resides between the aisles and different food corners. Empty, deserted, socially evaded. It’s a vacant castle where candy bars and carbonated drinks are the replacement for ancient bricks and wooden bars. “Klick”. The aluminum door opens. Twice. Assume once would meet a professor at a Kum-&-Go around 8 pm at night. Assume it’s real. Apparently, professors are hunters of cheap fountain drinks. Bargain of the night: 32 oz. drink for only 59 cents. The place shines thirstily when another customer approaches the food and fountain corner, which practically draws immediate attention to a disoriented customer. Even the desert accommodates oases. One chats with the fellow camel, joins forces for a while it seems, and after 2 minutes of irrelevant talk it all regresses back to human life. The cashier was evidently glad he could present the exotic offerings of his own oases, at least tonight that is. Surprisingly, among two customers one could claim to observe outmost diversity.
“Zzz-zz-nnnn-zzzz”. The ice machine recurrently starts humming. Have a slushy or some frozen food while you’re at it. “Cha-ching”. The cash register flies open and is pushed close just as fast. One could become distracted in this place. Too many unexpected sounds. Some sort of steady beep tone springs from the background of the tobacco facet. Marlboro Light; Marlboro Menthol; Marlboro 100’s; Marlboro Menthol Light; Marlboro Regular; Marlboro Ultra Light; Marlboro Paradise? Marlboro Heaven? Tobacco must be hard to come by at other places after seeing this arsenal of lung extinguishers. The sub convex mirrors at the end of the outside aisles reflect the image of the black guy exiting the station, fountain drink in his hand. Cashier X jolly awaits the two cars leaving, so he can too exit the red, purple and shop-worn interior. It won’t be his last cigarette for the night…

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WNC #2

September 8th, 2010 by Gustav

Germany Extends Nuclear Plants’ Life, by Judy Dempsey

This story from the N.Y. Times deals with the decision of Germany’s chancellor Angela Merkel to finally extend the program of nuclear energy for all 17 nuclear plants there is. Payment for the whole plan shall come from a newly imposed tax on utilities’ companies, mainly the 4 biggest energy producers in Germany. Merkel might face problems implementing her plan because she lacks majority representation in the parliament’s upper house.

I like this artcile a lot, and that is not only because I don’t have to click a “next page” button. The author organized her story well with presenting the most important facts in the first 3 paragraphs (including the lead, which is fairly short and sums up the story). One could basically stop reading there and get out with relevant information. The author then proceeds to include statistics and quotes from experts or respectively opponents of Merkel’s plan. The paragraphs are not building up on another, but they don’t have to. They are precise and usually contain one certain idea or information the author wants to present but not expand on. They way it is written is very formal and contains practically no subjective comments. No big words people need to dig for in their dictionaries; concise language which leads the reader to develop thoughts on related topics. A nice mixture of environmental policies, economy (taxation), political processes, and opinions to back it up.

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WNC #1

August 31st, 2010 by Gustav

Obama Says Iraq Combat Mission is Over, by Helene Cooper

This story talks about president Obama’s address to the population about the end of American involvement in Iraq. At least, that is what the author starts out with. Later in the article she digs a little deeper; evaluates feedback from the home front; shows statistics that prove the credibility of the president’s proclamation.

This is a very good article, containing a lot of seperate information in only two pages of online news. Somehow, all this information relates back to Obama’s administration. The quotes used by the author are easily put into context. The paragraphs are not too long, but at the same time distract a lot from finding main points. The lead-in is nice, the body well structured, just the end seems sort of out of place. The story is centered on the president’s message, so it would have been better to end on such a note. Also, sometimes the sentences make up a whole paragraph, which makes online reading even harder than it might be for some people. I personally wanted to know more about Obama’s intentions, which I could find, but which are also hidden amongst other information. A different headline, or relatively a more topic-concerned insight would get me more satisfaction. The story is definitely newsworthy, as is anything that comes straight FROM the White House TO the people.

http://www.nytimes.com/2010/09/01/world/01military.html?hp

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Introducing… Alison Jo Kusler

August 27th, 2010 by Gustav

Alison is from Akron, Iowa. She is 19 years of age and will be a sophomore here at Morningside College. For her degree she pursues a major in Biology and a minor in Journalism. Sports were big for her in High School, but last year, while attending Augustana College, she did not feel like playing any. The reason she transfered to “M’side” is softball, trying to help the team on the second base position. Alison has two older sisters, both out of school and one of which is married.

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