Nov 15 2018

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Story #3 – Broadcast

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  1. fuglsangon 26 Nov 2018 at 3:51 pm 1

    Good conversational writing. OK on leads. Good introductions of your sources. Good quotes as well, which means you’re asking good questions.

    You did go over recommended time. When that happens you may need to make sacrifices; cut a quote, cut a story. I’d say maybe cut one of the Sykes quotes (or shorten both) so you can give yourself an intro and outro.

    No soundbite on the spider silk story. This story also could have been cut down some. It needs to be clearer why this discovery could be important. Less important is all the technical jargon.

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