A woman was shot by her husband, Saturday, at 5 p.m. The couple had just been married 3 hours earlier. A neighbor had called the police. “I heard the sound of a shot, at least I think I did.” By the time the police arrived, the groom had fled.
This came as a shock to the neighbors. “I’d never seen him violent, never heard them yelling. It blows me away.” The shooting took place after the wife had thrown a plate of macaroni salad at him. The wife was shot in the abdomen and is in “satisfactory condition”, according to the hospital she was checked into.
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The lead isn’t there yet, Ben. What will get people’s attention? What will make them listen? “Bride is hospitalized three hours after her wedding. She was shot by the groom.”
You also need to identify who’s speaking, in the quotes and in the actuality.
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