An armed robbery occurred last night at 450 Stanley Street where two men were seen entering a store at approximately 8:30 p.m. One man held a gun on store owner Barney Joseph Jr. while the other took $382.65 from the register. The third man was seen in a car parked outside the store at the curb with the motor running as he waited for his partners.
According to the desk sergeant, Joseph had a pistol stored under the counter but had decided not to reach under a grab it. Joseph had stated that the robbery was over in under a minute and felt that it would have been unwise to reach for his gun after his father had encountered a similar event that resulted in his death.
25 years ago Joseph’s father was killed during a similar situation at the same store. When asked about the story, Joseph stated “Yes, Dad resisted, I guess. Anyway, they found him shot to death, his own gun in his hand, and a bullet in the store’s ceiling. I’d rather part with my money than my life”.
The first sentence is OK as the lead, though “occurred” is a weak verb.
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