Christians (plan on) Feed Qurans to the Fire!

This is the original lead:

A plan by a small Florida church to burn Qurans on September 11, which has triggered worldwide controversy, is a “recruitment bonanza for al Qaeda,” President Barack Obama said Thursday.

This is my rewrite:

Back in the ’60’s, after John Lennon declared the Beatles to be “more popular than Jesus,” many took to the streets and enthusiastically participated in public burnings of Beatles records. Today, offended Christians, this time motivated by a phobia to Muslims, plan to burn Qurans on September 11. The potential arsonists are members of a small Florida church, and their proposal has sparked world-wide controversy. Obama called the situation a “recruitment bonanza for al Qaeda.”

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One Response to “Christians (plan on) Feed Qurans to the Fire!”

  1. fuglsang says:

    I doubt your lead would make it by a newspaper editor, Ross. By comparing one situation to another you reveal yourself. You reveal your perception of the event rather than just relating a fact.

    This would be a perfectly fine lead for an opinion piece, or possibly as a magazine feature.