I believe that the most difficult part of writing my first story was trying to get the attributions right. I don’t know when it’s okay to just use an attribution and when it’s necessary to cite your information. Also, trying to rearrange my story to make my lead “less taxing” was interesting. I hope the story still flows well after the changes I made.
One of the revisions I made, as I mentioned in the last paragraph, was rearranging a couple paragraphs to make my lead less taxing. Instead of talking about Kaepernick’s refusal to stand for the national anthem right after the lead to give backstory, I decided to talk about Joyner’s speech first. By talking about Joyner’s speech first, I’m able to let the readers know that Alabama high school students aren’t in any real danger of being shot, it’s just Joyner condemning people that sit down during the national anthem.
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