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Comments(1) | –This weekend, a local firefighter dropped out of a tree while saving a cat. The savior Bob Harwood broke his left leg.
Luckily the cat and Howard are doing just fine. Howard is healing in St. Lukes Hospital.
–East High recently had fifteen students suspended in the past week.
Five of those students were caught smoking marijuana in the school parking. The other ten were protesting the previous suspension. Other problems are arising such as, food fight in the cafeteria and falst fire alarms.
Principle Laura Vibelius coments, “Not so much unrest becasue of suspension, but becasue of summer vacation being so near.”
— A Texaco gasoline truck was overturned on the outskirts of town.
Four families were evacuated because of sewer-line gas. Also, cars were being rerouted through the side streets to start clean up.
The clean up took about two hours to flush away.
“Savior” is kind of a loaded term, Miranda. Prefer directness and clarity: A Sioux City fireman broke his leg while rescuing a cat out of a tree.
#2 is good, but you don’t need “recently” if you include “past week,” which is more definite.
#3: What vandals/supervillain overturned the truck? “The was” makes this sound intentional.
Good selection of details.