Rewriting the Lead (In Class)
Article Lead: Kris Evans knows Iowa City. She know the main streets and the alleys. She knows the highways and the hangouts. She knows what colors to mix to make her brown hair a lovely shade of magenta.
First Option Lead: Kris Evans isn’t worried about the dangers of being a female cab driver in the city. When the manager of her first employer, Yellow Cab, questioned her feelings on being a women driving alone at night, Kris simply answered, “Don’t you think I can handle it?” Being a “big woman” as she puts it in Iowa City, she doesn’t seem worried.
Second Option Lead:”Being a woman cab driver you get a lot of ‘Turn here, honey,’ and ‘Do you know where it’s at?” Kris Evans says. She states, “because I’m a woman they think they can hit on me. That’s fine. But hit on me in the street. I’m working here.”
September 10th, 2018 at 2:00 pm
The quote lead(2) could work if it was one continuos quote. It’s possible that it was. Take out “She states” and it’s a bit smoother. If you had a bit more to work with, option one could be a nice scene.