Shooting
October 24, 2017
An interesting start to the honeymoon phase after a husband shot his wife in the stomach.
The newlywed is said to be in stable condition following a shooting incident at her wedding reception. The husband, Richard Bronson’s whereabouts are currently unknown.
It was reported that Laurette Bronson threw a plate of macaroni salad at her husband. He then shot her in the stomach and left abruptly.
A neighbor Walter Corse witnessed the incident *audio snippet*.
The family is keeping mum about the incident. Laurette Bronson requests privacy *audio snippet*.
November 1st, 2017 at 8:51 am
The throwaway/soft lede could work, but I don’t know about the word “interesting.” Surprising? Maybe shocking? I realize that sounds subjective, but broadcast is a bit more lenient. Is “keeping mum” a current phrase?
OK on organization and attribution of quotes.
Slow down a bit as you read. Pace yourself. Pause.