Feature Story
Thursday December 06th 2012, 4:06 pm
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So you’re having a bad day? Nothing is working out the way you quiet wanted it to? How about a bad year? It’s funny how when one bad thing happens it seems that everything else seems to go wrong as well. Everyone has been there, bad days happen to everyone.  Denise Simmions had a horrible year. You’ll want to recount your blessings after you hear about the year Denise had to endure. Your bad day wont seem so bad after all.

Earlier in the Spring Denise and her husband Bill had to put their beloved Vizsla, Tashee to sleep.  “She was such a sweet dog. The best dog that I had.” Denise said as she looked at a framed picture that was sitting on her coffee table. Her eyes began to fill with tears. Denise and Bill owned many dogs during their marriage, some of them even had puppies. “Tash was a great mom to her pups, she had two litters.” Denise went on talking about Tashee telling anecdotes of the times she would take her dog to her families lake house.  Tashee loved playing in the water it seemed, or she just loved being with her owners. Loosing a dog is like losing a friend. Denise spent her Summer moving on from the passing of her dog.  Spending time at the lake house with her friends and family. Good times were had through out the summer.

Soon Denise would go back to her full time job at Morningside College. As the secretary for the bookstore Denise would greet students and faculty with a contagious smile as they walked through the double doors. Unfortunately Morningside needed to make some budget cuts and had to lay off a handful of people.





     


you are doing great! make sure to reallllly set up the reader. make them think that all of the hardship and troubles are over, and then let them have it again. Make them doubt that anything else bad will happen and surprise them with the saddest story they’ve ever heard.

Comment by    Jescy 12.06.12 @ 4:22 pm

It’s difficult — and rare — that you will address the reader using “you.” Besides, this is a story about Denise, so keep the focus on her. You’ll also want to start with the bookstore. That’s the main issue (I think). The more of the Tashee story you use, the more it becomes a story about the dog. Which could be a story, but then you will use less of the bookstore info.

Comment by    fuglsang 12.07.12 @ 8:42 pm